The Tigers Game
By: Lilly
It was the top of the 4th. Miguel Cabrera was up to plat .There was a man on seancd base. The Oakland A's pitcher thow a fast ball inside. 1 ball no stricke. The next pitch. Start drown the middle of the plat.Miguel swong the bat. The ball hit the end of his bat. All the fans in the park were all on there feet. The ball launched out in to the park. Shooting throw the air going to left feild. I thot the ball was only going to be a teripol. Then the ball went just far anof to go over the fance. I told my dad" Oh my god they got the lend". We could hear the exad tiger cerod, cheering for him. I could not belive it. I was so saced the rest of the game. Then the final score was 3 to 0 Tiger, the A's are out of the playoff.
S: Action
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